Monday, March 31, 2014

5 Phrases + Script

"I need 25 miniature salt packets"
"Who has the paste?"
"I'm runnin' out of the happy stuff"
"Is this what I think it is Joe? Cocaine?"
"Be careful, there's a storm a brewin'"

EXT. Ron’s Van
                        RON
Is this what I think it is Joe? Cocaine?
                        JOE
Listen buddy, I can explain. It’s not quite what you think. It is, but listen-
Ron interrupts excitingly and throws the bags back to Joe.
                        RON
I don’t want to know Joe, I don’t know how you do it, but you might have saved us from eviction. You can sell this right? To one of your greasy buddies? Why didn’t you tell me?
Joe pauses, swallows, takes a deep breath and tosses the bags back into the van.
                        JOE
Well, uhh, I knew you wouldn’t approve of it Ron. I was uhh, going to Scotty’s to sell it to him actually. Told him earlier to keep it on the D.L., so you wouldn’t find out.
              RON
Very Sly. You’re right, you always think of something Joe. I’m glad we’re friends. Let’s catch some dinner.
              JOE
Yeah, sounds good.
  The two gather the fishing gear and make their way back to the fire pit. The two sit down.
                        RON
The trick is to lay a good foundation first. Then we need to set the kindling over the tinder in a form of a teepee. See? Like this.

Joe obviously isn’t interested in the fire; his eyes keep wandering over to the van.

1 comment:

  1. There's some great lines of dialogue here. You're missing the relationship between the characters. Who are Ron and Joe to each other. Also what are some of the details of Joe and Ron? How old are they? The scene will read and play differently based on these factors.

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